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I thought it was pretty good, Overall it felt kind of like a pink floyd song. It sounds like its unfinished, and if you plan to go anywhere with it I would give that version a straight up 10. I can see a sort of light drum track with maybe a classical guitar, but KEEP IT UP! Don't worry about what the other commenters say, a big group of the NG people are pretty harsh, and not understanding.